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luka
19-11-2018, 08:01 PM
It's time to get your hands dirty. I'll teach you how this is done. Cmon corpsey get involved. Muck in lad. This is your chance to work with the best.

luka
19-11-2018, 08:02 PM
I will start

Norweigea wool with ambiens synth setting luxe desert highlights to met flourish advent lipgloss plush integer performance durable fabric fit endurance circuit talcum towel absorbant regime credit fibre ratio in Enzyme breakdown revolutionary display tray sequence enchanted adjunct taupe to neckline

luka
19-11-2018, 08:03 PM
Please don't joke around though. Do it properly. Use your brain. Don't be a bunch of dicks.

luka
19-11-2018, 08:13 PM
Circumference ambit alloy tooled sprigot stop aluminium procedure spent
acid reduction convene allocation budget procedural agenda blocked
affidavit correspond twine cappillary quoit next integer bookend array
super catheter wins keel crude down shear feldspar mixed quartz slurry
slope factor conditioner rinse actual hard display needs vertical threshold
torsion vector flight path intersection smooth veer view landing countdown

luka
19-11-2018, 08:32 PM
Tutorial segment tidal engineering motif tryout jog seminar
gurry deposit rake conifer field marshal service error film
deleted archive reduction taint file corruption sheaf fade for
magenta ferric combustion index first alarm unit teeth veneer
sheet alloy ferment vat issue tallow runoff facsimile soy capsule
dun feather heavy to gale catch down vertical patch failure
acumen recruit payment schedule spasm twitch fabric taxi
chute radial cathexis endowment package harbour investment
view opportunity

luka
19-11-2018, 08:56 PM
Quiver limit measure degree to which tremor receipt audial light image retinal pink highlights flash image retinal phosphur burn horizon explode as image recede to disappear closer to functional use factor negation zero

luka
19-11-2018, 08:57 PM
Play play play!

luka
19-11-2018, 09:32 PM
steep poultice pedigree pyramid basalt wind edge passing diagonal to face lead
derive triangulate base to fix vulture arc corridor queer green dye paint pox virtue
data structures breed terminal future hack glacier tack windward mountain pass
peak performance features television gag reflex heated point of incision severed
from infection site serial camp entry

luka
19-11-2018, 09:35 PM
excitement enters along the adrenal gland quadrant pulses in white-blue flashes
nectar card slot taper niche ergonomic sachet

luka
19-11-2018, 09:40 PM
So shy fucking hell

luka
19-11-2018, 09:42 PM
Do it. Get it wrong. I will explain why it's wrong. Improve it. Try again.

luka
19-11-2018, 09:48 PM
Bridge and road infrastructure ploughshare cantilever arch cable
hung glance slice at intersection slice at event locus pang radium
chemical harm Sino-Russo treaty cover detonation pact alarm
concrete reinforcement rod counterfeit faction error at negotiation
stable.

luka
19-11-2018, 09:53 PM
containment quadrant elimination radius in quarantine zone strafe
airborne contaminant pact panic cable plague vector cancelled livestock
Deposit Peter morass needle cross marker earth hump upheaval
tumuli view owner vantage aerial Manx shearwater winters migratory
event-index.

luka
19-11-2018, 10:00 PM
Last one is a bit on the nose innit dial that one back a bit. Less is more.

luka
19-11-2018, 10:06 PM
gradient torque percentage hairpin pressure top speed
a-road transport corridor goods vehicle stowaway habit nest
bruise locus spread at Impact site heave tenant silo waste
heaven gasket sealed cylinder at clay tablet exhume gold
appliqué capsule cuneiform Herod urn millennium wealth
package portrait Ashtur circuit ratlines throughout the
contested territory

luka
19-11-2018, 10:10 PM
Chaldean funereal entablature black glaze auction exhibit
opportunity incise clay grass blade v nick tally library
oracle screen bead arrangement the state apparatus
wealth virtue glee envelope mine

luka
19-11-2018, 10:34 PM
pastel appliqué cash register hair pin anxious of problematising down the debate corridor of wrist pressure amplify syllable impulse plosives mesh curtain chokehold restraint sequence tether lock Provence oyster scallion

luka
19-11-2018, 10:42 PM
What bits do you like best? Why?

luka
19-11-2018, 10:43 PM
Where are the missteps? What did I do wrong? How should we correct it?

luka
19-11-2018, 11:55 PM
Should it savour segment terse to overcome
Mild autumnal rebuke catalogue arid interior
Basque austerities clarified in plaster sunlight
Pastel oblique catchment furnace and I
set to saw bench in early hope moment
caught the up arcing of that and followed
it to where bird distribution carried it into
provisional dawn ember.
The line of flight, up, up and away.

luka
20-11-2018, 12:06 AM
To Frankish incursion margin and all along the diffusion zone
Rhineware glass deposit disturbed gravel bed bone midden hinge
to population pressure river range limit water oxbow migrations
into the settled quadrant iron entry point in sudden, exultant
desperate violence. God evidence in brooch inlay jewelled Ivory
Casement vegetal life pulse describes intestinal involutions within
the ordained frame.

luka
20-11-2018, 12:40 AM
To praise or to withhold praise until worthy of praise

luka
20-11-2018, 01:00 AM
Amorous marble. Redeem voucher.
Enter incarnate maelstrom. The torque
Of cyclonic matter.

luka
20-11-2018, 04:30 PM
Denunciation tripwire lattices passage
party position white-hot and volatile
fissures under flight conditions
cable minister for interior affairs!
reflex rejoinder from otherwise occupied
realism makes a return, emerges sheepishly
from beneath kitchen sink, brandishing a plunger.
Where's My Shepherd's Pie?

HMGovt
20-11-2018, 10:15 PM
https://pbs.twimg.com/media/DsY6NywUcAAqfKI?format=jpg

luka
21-11-2018, 12:44 AM
That's the spirit! At least someone's still got a pulse!

luka
21-11-2018, 12:48 AM
Near per irregular tax issue spend cascade
seal past fen tier minimum pod wire nil ex
inactive shell casing catch wire
sink net torch burr
amp nodule sunk
keel rod reach
to endures
need

luka
21-11-2018, 01:07 AM
Captive shrunk attachment
Petal cobble node
image capture steel casing
iodine spend bracket
issue major brand relaunch

luka
21-11-2018, 01:23 AM
Cathedral sewage irregular spend graph
caul of heavy salvage breath needle
budge plastic code net siege channel need
huge turbulence pocket crunch figures
blink cattle torch sheath branch overlay
asphodel fund remix feed pellets

luka
21-11-2018, 11:15 AM
Timed feed-pellet release
Cannibalise cancelled product
in Vicus Circus of Rearticulation
The Intestinal Loop.
The Why of All Flesh
Stripped to bare bone
in the hyena machines.

HMGovt
21-11-2018, 11:53 AM
That's the spirit! At least someone's still got a pulse!

That was created by an AI that had been trained on Buzzfeed headlines. There is some gold in there.
https://twitter.com/minimaxir/status/1064604986951163905

We tried the haunted head hacks

They cried while camping

luka
21-11-2018, 12:00 PM
To gain POWER one must be fatally compromised, i.e. in a position of weakness
I’m sorry you haven’t been feeling the energy of your crystals. Some crystals have a very gentle energy that works slowly
your parents didn’t send you to university so you could sell macaroni cheese and craft beer out of an airstream travel trailer.
The result of this was a rift through the dimensions that opened up a tear in the lower fourth dimension; the astral realm.
it has long been a dark brooding place, a place the natives fear to tread
Tumeric is very helpful in keeping your pineal gland healthy

there are really 13 Zodiac signs, not 12. They have kept the 13th hidden for centuries because it is the sign of the Dragon.
You are so lucky he favorited your tweet! He will never notice me
Humans have been conditioned to worship the holographic deception and the agents that perpetuate it.
I found out I can confuse them by thinking random thoughts and by doing random math in my head. They don't like it when I do that.
All this information is objective & can be found by anyone travelling to a specific 'library' level of consciousness called Level 27
But hey, just sit on your ass and judge people to "Hell" while worshiping entities outside of self. See how that works for you. Esp after CERN opens that portal into that...realm. They did this back in Atlantis, and the same entities are doing it again now.
Why Are Chemtrails Being Digitally Added to Old Movies?
There is a MAGICO-SHAMANIC UNDERGROUND operating right under your nose but you will never find us.
""sometimes EDEN feels like a gilded PRISON and PARADISE beneath our dignity""
the humanzee is 5times stronger than a human so they want to make them into soldiers and send them to war
I think alot of these monolith structures built with massive stones were moved with chants and different sounds.
Do you really want to live in a timeline where billions of people die within days as a result of the Shift, Cleansing, Apocalypse
SWITCH TIMELINE/ CUT TAPE/ AVERT CATASTROPHE
he most horrible thing happened to me today...
I was walking down the street and i came across a man peeing against a fence. it was disgusting! I was mortified at seeing him be so feral! then, out of nowhere, I felt something warm trickle down my leg. I went to the doctor and he said the medical term for what happened to me is "sympathy urination".

droid
21-11-2018, 03:32 PM
This pops into my head everytime I see this thread title.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M7t_5DAar8M

luka
21-11-2018, 10:30 PM
Memory frame. Time reprisal. Sclerotic paste van
videotape fracture quest yearbook nearly man.
Comfort as permanent condition. Queer node
of overlooked valley. The furze in red flourish
pit probe against lode unleash the thunderbolt
loop back to first time, shocked and gasping at
sudden pleasure. Huh. It bleeds into dulled
repetition, forlorn knowing its gone for good.
Rejig the remaining pieces. Make do
with what you have.

luka
21-11-2018, 10:33 PM
Distant cousin twice removed heresy by hearsay the crevice is ventured
But never gained. Repast is a perfunctory affair. Feeling a dull ache in
the neck, a sure symptom of displaced guilt.
Now is never the right time.

yyaldrin
22-11-2018, 11:05 AM
i'm also too shy for this topic but wanted to say i came across a very nice word yesterday that i had never heard of but forgot already. it's a synonym for something like a spear and it ends on -atl. if i were a poem i would definitely want it to be part of me

HMGovt
22-11-2018, 11:06 AM
i'm also too shy for this topic but wanted to say i came across a very nice word yesterday that i had never heard of but forgot already. it's a synonym for something like a spear and it ends on -atl. if i were a poem i would definitely want it to be part of me

Quetzacoatl?

No, found it: atlatl
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Spear-thrower

yyaldrin
22-11-2018, 11:08 AM
Quetzacoatl?

No, found it: atlatl
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Spear-thrower

atlatl! yes! interesting that i couldn't remember it cos its the exact same three letters repeated. my poem will have the word atlatl.

yyaldrin
22-11-2018, 11:13 AM
Bridge and road infrastructure ploughshare cantilever arch cable
hung glance slice at intersection slice at event locus pang radium
chemical harm Sino-Russo treaty cover detonation pact alarm
concrete reinforcement rod counterfeit faction error at negotiation
stable.

i like this one the most

Corpsey
22-11-2018, 11:41 AM
DRAFT 1: Fixed grin on your Butter Bill
Six digits webbed on palmate feet
Plumage shaded pleats grey frills
Like snow absorbing balls of sleet

DRAFT 65:
Bright orange bill
Blood orange feet
White plume pleats short shadow frills
Muddied snow becoming sleet.

https://3.bp.blogspot.com/-A77n9B6sL3Y/UyNsrHxrklI/AAAAAAAAL0Y/yPtb_Z-BWek/s1600/Fat+white+duck+or+goose+with+yellow+bill+and+orang e+feet+on+water's+edge+-+McGovern+Lake+island+March+2014.JPG

Corpsey
22-11-2018, 01:06 PM
I've revised the above approximately 12 times not even joking

EDIT: 14

Corpsey
22-11-2018, 01:18 PM
It's pretty shit

I thought shadowed frills was quite good but they don't look like frills do they

More like cloud formations

Corpsey
22-11-2018, 01:54 PM
20+ revisions

It's fun playing around with this, meaningless as it is

yyaldrin
22-11-2018, 02:31 PM
i'm no native english speaker so please don't flame me. here is my poem called "the rattle"

the rattle

rattle, kettle, atlatl
otter, ochre, october
weather, leather, feather

https://www.warpaths2peacepipes.com/images/atlatl-stick-thrower-1.gif

mistersloane
22-11-2018, 02:50 PM
Norweigea wool with ambiens synth setting luxe desert highlights to met flourish advent lipgloss plush integer performance durable fabric fit endurance circuit talcum towel absorbant regime credit fibre ratio in Enzyme breakdown revolutionary display tray sequence enchanted adjunct taupe to neckline


Circumference ambit alloy tooled sprigot stop aluminium procedure spent
acid reduction convene allocation budget procedural agenda blocked
affidavit correspond twine cappillary quoit next integer bookend array
super catheter wins keel crude down shear feldspar mixed quartz slurry
slope factor conditioner rinse actual hard display needs vertical threshold
torsion vector flight path intersection smooth veer view landing countdown


Tutorial segment tidal engineering motif tryout jog seminar
gurry deposit rake conifer field marshal service error film
deleted archive reduction taint file corruption sheaf fade for
magenta ferric combustion index first alarm unit teeth veneer
sheet alloy ferment vat issue tallow runoff facsimile soy capsule
dun feather heavy to gale catch down vertical patch failure
acumen recruit payment schedule spasm twitch fabric taxi
chute radial cathexis endowment package harbour investment
view opportunity


Quiver limit measure degree to which tremor receipt audial light image retinal pink highlights flash image retinal phosphur burn horizon explode as image recede to disappear closer to functional use factor negation zero


steep poultice pedigree pyramid basalt wind edge passing diagonal to face lead
derive triangulate base to fix vulture arc corridor queer green dye paint pox virtue
data structures breed terminal future hack glacier tack windward mountain pass
peak performance features television gag reflex heated point of incision severed
from infection site serial camp entry


excitement enters along the adrenal gland quadrant pulses in white-blue flashes
nectar card slot taper niche ergonomic sachet


Bridge and road infrastructure ploughshare cantilever arch cable
hung glance slice at intersection slice at event locus pang radium
chemical harm Sino-Russo treaty cover detonation pact alarm
concrete reinforcement rod counterfeit faction error at negotiation
stable.


containment quadrant elimination radius in quarantine zone strafe
airborne contaminant pact panic cable plague vector cancelled livestock
Deposit Peter morass needle cross marker earth hump upheaval
tumuli view owner vantage aerial Manx shearwater winters migratory
event-index.


gradient torque percentage hairpin pressure top speed
a-road transport corridor goods vehicle stowaway habit nest
bruise locus spread at Impact site heave tenant silo waste
heaven gasket sealed cylinder at clay tablet exhume gold
appliqué capsule cuneiform Herod urn millennium wealth
package portrait Ashtur circuit ratlines throughout the
contested territory


Chaldean funereal entablature black glaze auction exhibit
opportunity incise clay grass blade v nick tally library
oracle screen bead arrangement the state apparatus
wealth virtue glee envelope mine


pastel appliqué cash register hair pin anxious of problematising down the debate corridor of wrist pressure amplify syllable impulse plosives mesh curtain chokehold restraint sequence tether lock Provence oyster scallion


Should it savour segment terse to overcome
Mild autumnal rebuke catalogue arid interior
Basque austerities clarified in plaster sunlight
Pastel oblique catchment furnace and I
set to saw bench in early hope moment
caught the up arcing of that and followed
it to where bird distribution carried it into
provisional dawn ember.
The line of flight, up, up and away.


To Frankish incursion margin and all along the diffusion zone
Rhineware glass deposit disturbed gravel bed bone midden hinge
to population pressure river range limit water oxbow migrations
into the settled quadrant iron entry point in sudden, exultant
desperate violence. God evidence in brooch inlay jewelled Ivory
Casement vegetal life pulse describes intestinal involutions within
the ordained frame.


Amorous marble. Redeem voucher.
Enter incarnate maelstrom. The torque
Of cyclonic matter.

mistersloane
22-11-2018, 02:51 PM
Denunciation tripwire lattices passage
party position white-hot and volatile
fissures under flight conditions
cable minister for interior affairs!
reflex rejoinder from otherwise occupied
realism makes a return, emerges sheepishly
from beneath kitchen sink, brandishing a plunger.
Where's My Shepherd's Pie?


Cut and paste by HMGOVT


Near per irregular tax issue spend cascade
seal past fen tier minimum pod wire nil ex
inactive shell casing catch wire
sink net torch burr
amp nodule sunk
keel rod reach
to endures
need


Captive shrunk attachment
Petal cobble node
image capture steel casing
iodine spend bracket
issue major brand relaunch


Cathedral sewage irregular spend graph
caul of heavy salvage breath needle
budge plastic code net siege channel need
huge turbulence pocket crunch figures
blink cattle torch sheath branch overlay
asphodel fund remix feed pellets


Timed feed-pellet release
Cannibalise cancelled product
in Vicus Circus of Rearticulation
The Intestinal Loop.
The Why of All Flesh
Stripped to bare bone
in the hyena machines.


Memory frame. Time reprisal. Sclerotic paste van
videotape fracture quest yearbook nearly man.
Comfort as permanent condition. Queer node
of overlooked valley. The furze in red flourish
pit probe against lode unleash the thunderbolt
loop back to first time, shocked and gasping at
sudden pleasure. Huh. It bleeds into dulled
repetition, forlorn knowing its gone for good.
Rejig the remaining pieces. Make do
with what you have.


Distant cousin twice removed heresy by hearsay the crevice is ventured
But never gained. Repast is a perfunctory affair. Feeling a dull ache in
the neck, a sure symptom of displaced guilt.
Now is never the right time.


Fixed grin on your Butter Bill
Six digits webbed on palmate feet
Plumage shaded pleats grey frills
Like snow absorbing balls of sleet


Bright orange bill
Blood orange feet
White plume pleats shadow frills
Muddied snow becoming sleet.




rattle, kettle, atlatl
otter, ochre, october
weather, leather, feather

pattycakes_
22-11-2018, 03:30 PM
What once confined to glossy page
Hath spilled into florid communic
Youth sways in symbols but
To what end?

luka
22-11-2018, 03:32 PM
Yay now we're getting somewhere! Thanks for joining in you lot.

luka
22-11-2018, 03:33 PM
Fixed grin on your Butter Bill is great. It sounds like some kind of obscure
Cockney rhyming slang. I really like it.

yyaldrin
22-11-2018, 03:49 PM
seen thru closed eyes
warm glow of flickering candlelights

forms changing, silhouettes shaking
no more hibernating

altamira is now excavated
google flight mode activated

atlatl, atlatl ATLATL

http://centros3.pntic.mec.es/cp.cisneros/Replica%20Altamira.jpg

luka
23-11-2018, 10:46 AM
Imagine not being able to give yourself permission to write a poem. Doesn't bear thinking about.
Like you're not allowed.

mistersloane
24-11-2018, 02:39 PM
Imagine the push/pull of not thinking that it's real.
Do you believe in demons, you don't think that the devil is real?
There were sirens that day, is your familiar real?
Everything's real, fentanyl's real,
The darknet is designed to kill.

mistersloane
24-11-2018, 02:41 PM
seen thru closed eyes
warm glow of flickering candlelights

forms changing, silhouettes shaking
no more hibernating

altamira is now excavated
google flight mode activated

atlatl, atlatl

ATLATL

Imagine the push/pull of not thinking that it's real.
Do you believe in demons, you don't think that the devil is real?
There were sirens that day, is your familiar real?
Everything's real, fentanyl's real,
Like the darknet isn't designed to kill.

luka
27-11-2018, 01:10 PM
My internet is cut off but as compensation I've written 'prediction tablet' my new book-poem. Can't afford to give freebies this time. Too expensive sorry. Probably will send Sloane one. Only exception

mistersloane
28-11-2018, 06:08 AM
My internet is cut off but as compensation I've written 'prediction tablet' my new book-poem. Can't afford to give freebies this time. Too expensive sorry. Probably will send Sloane one. Only exception

YAY!

luka
17-01-2019, 01:03 PM
https://www.mixcloud.com/Resonance/late-lunch-with-out-to-lunch-16th-january-2019/

Some of the words I wrote for my psychedelic poetry workshop in this show. Starts about 11 minutes in. Woebot and Sufi were the only dissensus people in attendance so this is as close as the rest of you will get.

Still owe prediction tablets to sloane and yyaldrun. Im a bit sick atm but I'll get it done soonish.

Corpsey
12-02-2019, 03:23 PM
are you beer body ready?
ache that was his wound and The opiate throb
looking for your next job?
when I am gone away
Remember me

luka
12-02-2019, 03:49 PM
Ember me ashes
Till cold.
Sorrow is it, sobbing
Hurt at heart and howling
How is it
we never have
A home

Corpsey
13-02-2019, 10:29 AM
She's impulsive by nature
surprising her famous family with her decisions.
And hundred indecisions,
And hundred visions and revisions.
So Nature keeps the reverent frame
And Khloe Kardashian proudly showcases her dramatic hair transformation on Tuesday,
Branding her decision 'craziness'.
Under the firelight, under the brush, her hair
Spread out in fiery points
Glowed into words, then would be savagely still.

The Keeping Up With The Kardashians star, 34, revealed she had enlisted the help of Kendall Jenner's hair stylist to chop eight inches off her locks.
Много ли человеку земли нужно?
Ever borrowing money to buy stocks,

sadmanbarty
19-02-2019, 02:58 PM
ectoplasm spasm, orgasm in the chasm
that man can't imagine, enter the dragon

sadmanbarty
19-02-2019, 03:12 PM
the phantasm that hasn't happened

Corpsey
19-02-2019, 03:25 PM
attract rack and ruin and
incite senseless sentiments

how was your weekend away with the kids?

sorry this is more a reminder note for me later

sadmanbarty
20-02-2019, 11:37 AM
baked beans
bin bags
bread
eggs
milk
dog food

sorry this is more a reminder note for me later

Corpsey
20-02-2019, 11:43 AM
Couldn't tell the difference between that and contemporary poetry though TBH

INSERT JEREMY CLARKSON GIF HERE

Corpsey
20-02-2019, 11:45 AM
I've been listening to the small talk in my office thinking about how you could turn it into poetry

Or better yet distort it and mangle it and make it extreme and evil

But really Eliot (not to mention Joyce) had this all sewn up by about 1922.

sadmanbarty
20-02-2019, 11:48 AM
i really don't understand poetry. i can't understand the paradigm it's working in. its like people who hear jazz and just scoobup beebup or a racket. what are the parameters? someone post a really good bit of a poem and annotate where the appeal is.

luka
20-02-2019, 11:51 AM
I'd be wary of learning and thinking about metre etc. It tends to deaden the ear.

luka
20-02-2019, 11:53 AM
Me and barty literally about to go and perform improv jazz poetry. Can't wait.

sadmanbarty
20-02-2019, 11:55 AM
is it like "man done dick that bitch/man smash that whizz" in zone 2's no hook?

would i be looking for the same appeal as that in prynne or yeats?

Corpsey
20-02-2019, 11:58 AM
What has only clicked for me in the last week for some reason is that stress is more tied to natural speech than prosodic rules...

But I think it is useful to have the iambic beat in mind when reading Shakespeare, e.g., cos you get more of a sense of his rhythmic diversions from it...

I do think poetry is more like music than I realised, although that can be a misleading comparison - but as with music, you want to fall in love with it on an instinctual level BEFORE learning about time signatures and intervals and all that.

This sort of thing is obviously not as SIGNIFICANT as the waste land but I think it helps you fall in love with poetry, it's the clever rhythms, rhymes, alliteration etc...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nx5190dEy84

luka
20-02-2019, 12:18 PM
is it like "man done dick that bitch/man smash that whizz" in zone 2's no hook?

would i be looking for the same appeal as that in prynne or yeats?

In many ways, yes.