Everyone else's less wonderful poetry thread

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Just got this message, from some bot. Got a big excited at first!

 

[0bleak]

@dilbert1 (and probably most certainly others) - you can probably guess what caused my stream-of-consciousness spontaneous riffing when you look at the artwork that I first started thinking about drawing (that's with the hope that the drawing isn't so bad that you can't make it out), before getting side-track into writing that

Post your paintings

Drawings, paintings, it's all the same thing. Post the drawings when you feel ready.

www.dissensus.com

 

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The light turning off
Changes things quite a lot
You are alien mother
And stern rabbit

I hear voices
Coming from the stream
I see the spring clearly
I see the train by its lights
So many people passing through

I touch ice to my cheeks
And think of you
I touch inside you
Feel your fibres
And hang from you

I touch you
I go deep down
Inside you

I touch you
I take from what's inside you
I smell you
I breathe you

I pull the stones out from under you
And smell my hands
I smell the frost from the snow

Can I taste you?
So spongy and elastic

I gather frost from you
And place it inside my mouth

In the shining light
I projected emotion onto your face

You smell alive
I wipe the frost into my eyes
And now I can see you

I can see through you
You are something else from each direction

 

[version]

Is this an ode to a bottle of beer?

 

[catalog]

No it's an ode to this incredible tree

 

[luka]

Its actually not bad catalog

 

[luka]

Youre not pretending to be an idiot. Doesnt do saacharine faux naievite

 

[catalog]

it sort of came to me spontaneously.
if you want to hear me saying it, it's here https://www.mfetzcalatto.com/alienmother.html