Mvuent's Live Q&A session: TONIGHT, TONIGHT.

[luka]

you have a bad ameerican habit of trying to be pally with your readers.

 

[luka]

or like, youre trying to treat them as peers. theyre not peers. youre telling them seomthing. they just have to accept it.

 

[mvuent]

that’s interesting but again, a specific example or two would go a long way

 

[sus]

The biggest problem with mvuents writing is he doesnt do enough of it. Everything else is distraction

 

[thirdform]

you’ve been doomscrolling for over an hour. i have to go to work now but give me something to contemplate while i put meat on a shelf.

Destroy Brian Eno.

Musically, I mean. as a person he is just a bog standard leftist, can't really hope for more from art wankers.

 

[sus]

I have a friend in Paris he will take you to Club.

 

[luka]

The biggest problem with mvuents writing is he doesnt do enough of it. Everything else is distraction

i think the time to be nice to mvuent is over. we were correct to be really nice to him when he was a child but now he is a man. so we have to be tough with him from today onwards

 

[sus]

For instance

It's a travesty that we have not yet gotten an auto fictional account of ian stacking frozen meat on the shelves. That would be brilliant. Very simple format. Sentence where he describes his action. Sentence where he describes his thoughts. Lots of repetition perhaps some of the action sentences are the same or very slight variations. Same with the internal thought process account. A gradual slow burn of paragraphs accumulating to frozen effect

 

[luka]

every time i meet someone from minnesotta i ask them if they know ian champion from trader joes

 

[version]

I have a friend in Paris he will take you to Club.

 

[mvuent]

i think the time to be nice to mvuent is over. we were correct to be really nice to him when he was a child but now he is a man. so we have to be tough with him from today onwards

luke davis. i keep asking you for examples we can work with. you CAN elevate this critique beyond your habitual wank sessions ("i'm a magical elf and everyone else is an idiot") if you actually want to. i know you can do it!

 

[luka]

i dunno why i have to do all the work when ive given you very lucid targeted advice already!

 

[mvuent]

you don't have to do "all the work" lol. i'm asking you to pick out just one single passage that exemplifies what you're saying. engage with the writing instead of the general impression of it/me you have in your head. just for like 2 seconds. then i'll do all the work figuring out how to improve it.

 

[luka]

ok one sec
wheres the blog again?

 

[mvuent]

Aloysius

aloysiusplace.blogspot.com

 

[sus]

And the world wept
For a moment of great promise had been extinguished

 

[thirdform]

i dunno why i have to do all the work when ive given you very lucid targeted advice already!

uh oh are you on the Shpongle again?