My Songwriting Clinic

Murphy

Murphy

cat malogen
luka said:
it was an unfortunate imbroglio
involving the minister without portfolio
the press described it as an own goalio
but i saw the hand of Spymaster Ludd.
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liking this form where the final rhyme throws you with a surreal twist - brain is subconsciously expecting the resonance of rhyme to land on a “lio” but it’s sidestepped like a rugby dummy pass move (does this make sense?)

intersection of punchy and a form of English whimsy, could Death to America! add this language in electronically modulated flat cockney deadpan?
 
luka

luka

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It was the biggest wave
Brad had seen in all his days
He said I'm going to ride this tsunami to shore
 
luka

luka

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for shakespeare's birthday

chips and saveloy, chips and saveloy
when it's time for supper we have chips and saveloy
saveloy for breakfast, saveloy for tea
when it's time for sustenance it's saveloy for me
 
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thirdform

pass the sick bucket
luka said:
now he's really lost his mind
he's built a tunnel into time

if you go to the Mandalay
be sure to order the parfait

it was at the all you can eat buffet
when he turned to me to say


i'll never bow to the goblin lord
not as long as i can hold a sword

he said brain swap brain swap, brain exchange
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About as ham-fisted and neurotically erotic as a comatose onyerbike Tebbit. But maybe there is subversion in that. has he set it to music now? A neoliberal power cord ditty should do the trick. just an incessant neanderthal anti-funky 4-4 backbeat. lazy enough for that cunt Steve Lamacq to a-list it.
 
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thirdform

pass the sick bucket
luka said:
it was an unfortunate imbroglio
involving the minister without portfolio
the press described it as an own goalio
but i saw the hand of Spymaster Ludd.
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You must repeat that first line 4 times. make it a hook, Lucius!
 
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