Suspended's Poetry Apprenticeship

[sus]

Post your poems or be forever a peanut gallery pseud.

Man in the arena. Post your poems.

 

[sus]

You didn't do any translation at all when you did that, and nor did the machine.

You're impossible.

 

[sus]

I've never heard you make a poetic gesture in your life

 

[mixed_biscuits]

Post your poems

When you're ready to appreciate to them.

 

[sus]

Your name is mixed biscuits. Why on earth did you choose that name. You named yourself mixed biscuits?

 

[sus]

You're trying to tell me about poetry and you named yourself mixed biscuits?

 

[luka]

biscuits mate is rubbish cos he has no flair for langugae its all written in the same dull register with no rise and fall in intensity, no modulation of the line, no building up of intensity, no sudden changes of direction, no interesting word choices, no memorable phrases, no interesting ideas, nothing to mark it out as a product of its time, no concrete details or awareness of the actual world about him

 

[luka]

no wit, no beauty, no pathos, no sense of urgency or significance

 

[mixed_biscuits]

I can't believe it: a sus trolling attempt has actually half way paid off. At least the adults in the room have had the opportunity of being introduced to Dr Wynn Owen's splendid oeuvre, and for that I am grateful despite myself, sus.

 

[sus]

Tell me one thing you care about in poetry. One effect it accomplishes that you value. Give me anything other than this fusty servile respect for English "tradition" and the "scholars" of Old English.

 

[Corpsey]

"that saved the crew it saved"

 

[sus]

One living organic functionality and not a fetish for fossils

 

[luka]

it doesn't come alive at any point which is why he is forced to read it in that dull monotone, the poetry is a dull monotone

 

[mixed_biscuits]

biscuits mate is rubbish cos he has no flair for langugae its all written in the same dull register with no rise and fall in intensity, no modulation of the line, no building up of intensity, no sudden changes of direction, no interesting word choices, no memorable phrases, no interesting ideas, nothing to mark it out as a product of its time, no concrete details of awareness of the actual world about him

 

[sus]

What if Biscuits is Andrew Wynn

 

[sus]

I'd feel bad for what I'd said. I'd think how hurt he must feel.

 

[luka]

everything is rote or else nonsensical. theres no reason to write these poems. they don't do anything that has never been done before and better.

 

[sus]

Is it possible has anyone met him? Can they confirm he doesnt look like that

 

[sus]

everything is rote or else nonsensical. theres no reason to write these poems. they don't do anything that has never been done before and better.

Yeah

 

[luka]

Is it possible has anyone met him? Can they confirm he doesnt look like that

i have. he doesnt look like that im pleased to say.