Very short poems you like

[pattycakes_]

within could have winged it

 

[sus]

The sun is always rising and it's always setting and what matters is where you stand

 

[sus]

"We often proceed as if we know things without a sense of what knowledge even is…. The earth is turning, for instance: sure, we know that because we’ve memorized it. But our knowledge of the earth’s turn is false, it is knowledge without context, disconnected from the rest of the universe. When the sun rises, we think it’s rising. When it sets, we think it’s setting.”

 

[luka]

He who binds to himself a joy
Does the winged life destroy
He who kisses the joy as it flies
Lives in eternity's sunrise

Only good one so far

 

[woops]

I'm not saying it isn't beautiful, true etc and I'm not going to try to improve on it. i just don't think that last line quite scans

 

[luka]

You have put a lot of effort into voicing eternitys to make it work

 

[Benny Bunter]

If you emphasise eternity's, as you should cos it's a key word, it works perfectly, and it varies the rhythm in an interesting way.

 

[pattycakes_]

What about just removing in?

Lives eternity's sunrise

emphasize lives and rise

 

[Benny Bunter]

That would destroy the sense